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DarthBrendo · Posted: Sat Nov 18, 2006 02:12 am Post subject:

Sounds interesting to say the least...
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Obi-here · Posted: Sat Nov 18, 2006 09:54 am Post subject:

Thanks both Brendo and Nokrt for your replies...I hope this made you interested enough to leave comments when it comes out. Wink

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I usually leave comments or attempt to once I read through it.

I think I left one on Loop Holes.

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This Decemeber

A HERO WILL RISE FROM AN UNEXPECTED SOURCE.

But will our savior arise too late? Or will a verdict be made too soon.

Find out on an all new The Final Trial: Chapter 6.

Doom · Posted: Sat Dec 02, 2006 11:11 pm Post subject:

In the next chapter of Star Wars: Return Revelations and Revenge (being updated on Dec )

"The Jedi have always been a problem since the days of the old Republic. They have caused wars among themselves that nearly annihilates our way of life. Well now it's time to fight back. I have found away to use the ysalamari's blood as the answer to this phenomon, allow me to introduce use to the Jedi ...cure."

When news about a serum that can surpress the medichlorians in Jedi permantly, that would make a Jedi normal, reaches to Stryfe, an evil Sith who believes the Jedi should conquer the galaxy with him as their leader, he and Luke Skywalker, wishing to protect the galaxy, enter a War that would end all Wars.

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See the true origins of Stryfe, the mystery concerning Mara Jade, the return of Mace Windu and Boba Fett, the past of Han Solo, the revelation of the Skywalker mother(Padme), the prophecy of the Sons of the Suns, the revenge of a Jedi and the return of Anakin Skywalker. This is the fanfic where the heroes must make a last stand.
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Zero · L.K.N. Joined: 06 Jul 2002 Posts: 10117

Sounds like X-Men 3 to me.
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Doom · Posted: Sun Dec 03, 2006 12:42 am Post subject:

I know, recently I have been a little preoccupied with Marvel. The only thing I based is the idea to stop Jedi by stopping their medichlorians. But I am making it totally original, mostly.

Do you wish me to change my ideas?
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Silas · Posted: Sun Dec 03, 2006 02:15 pm Post subject:

Why would you ask someone that? It's your idea, run with it. So what if nobody likes it?
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Sasori · L.A.P. Joined: 08 Feb 2006 Posts: 26325

He laid there, one arm detached from his body, his only weapon gone. He was hopeless and the current picking up speed was about to take him away. He could do nothing more, he was trapped. Looking upon the face of the monster in front of him he could do nothing but stand there in agony.

"Obi Wan never told you what happened to your father..." spoke the sadistic voice of Darth Vader.

"He told me enough," said Luke, distraught at the thought of his father's killer mentioning his name, "He told me you killed him."

"No...I am your father."

The voices were screaming inside Luke's mind. How could this be true? The man he most trusted in this galaxy lied to him, and the one he distrusted the most is the one who is of his flesh and blood? This was madness it can't be true.

"No...No...That's not true...that's IMPOSSIBLE!"

"Search your feelings YOU KNOW IT TO BE TRUE!"

"NOOOOOOOOOOOOoooooooooo Noooo," the pain scourged through him worse than anything before. This was true. It is true. He was his father. This horrible mechanic evil was of him. There was no escape.

"Luke, you can destroy the emperor, he has foreseen this," said the voice in a more empowering way. Not threatening but trustful and wise, "It is your destiny."

"Join me and together we can rule the Galaxy together as Father and Son!"

He placed his arm out for Luke to grab. How could he grab his hand? He was evil he knew he was evil. He had done so much to Luke. He killed Obi Wan. He killed innocents on Alderaan. He almost killed Leia. But Obi Wan lied to him. HE LIED TO HIM! Perhaps Vader was not as horrible as one might perceive.

Luke took his hand and placed it on his fathers.

Skywalker, Dark Lord (An AU transition from ESB)

Coming this New Years.

Doom · Posted: Sun Dec 03, 2006 06:20 pm Post subject:

Havent there been many fanfics of luke turning to the dark side? anyway looking forward to it.
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Silas · Posted: Sun Dec 03, 2006 06:27 pm Post subject:

There have, but coming from the different writers personal touches they are all different in some way. I can't wait for this.
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Amidala Skywalker · Posted: Tue Dec 05, 2006 08:37 am Post subject:

Sounds interesting, Nokrt. I have a soft spot for AU from ESB (anyone remember Hope's Battle?) Wink

I'm sure I'll definately be watching this when it comes out!
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Skye Organa · Posted: Tue Dec 05, 2006 06:26 pm Post subject:

Sounds interesting. I'm looking forward to reading it in the new year.
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Tiana Calthye · Posted: Tue Dec 05, 2006 09:40 pm Post subject:

For the sake of my own amusement, I'm going to take trailers to the extreme. Keep an eye on this thread for gradually appearing teaser trailers. Very Happy

When I'm closer to the release, I'll start putting out more comprehensive trailers... ones with more spoilers.

I'll probably end up with about five in total.

So. NSO: Division's first teaser trailer. The trailer that just includes a shiny logo and theme music and makes people get anxious. Before anyone kills themselves figuring it out, the character featured is not canonical or a major, if at all, character in Mirrormath.

This fiction will not require Mirrormath as a precedant, as I am considering MM to be a very long prologue, and all necessary details that were not released in that fiction shall be elaborated upon in this one. I'm anticipating a January/early Febuary release, as I don't intend on posting until I have about six chapters completed and betaed.

(yes, yes, that's right. Real art. Wink

Hand lettered, no less. Typographers, shut up.)
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DarthBrendo · Posted: Wed Dec 06, 2006 02:15 am Post subject:

So does that mean you're going to finish Mirrormath?
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Doom · Posted: Sat Dec 16, 2006 10:29 pm Post subject:

The J.net Library Presents...

a nominee of the 2006 Fanfiction Awards for Best Story...

Luke Skywalker enters a small cold room and sees a clear box with cut off and burned limbs inside.
"It's my father," says Luke almost regretfully to Han Solo.
-"Your father?"
Luke hands the preservation box to Lando."Are you sure want to do this? I mean bring the Darth Vader back?"
"He's not Vader anymore," replied Luke with a hint of being annoyed.
Leia Organa-Solo collapses on the floor. On the balcony Leia says to Han,"My dreams are getting worse. I feel something bad is about to happen."
A giant laser cuts through the senate building and major communties on Coruscant. TIEs battle against the Republic X-wings. Dark Jedi leap into the air and began to battle the Jedi in a dark,foggy part of Coruscant as flames begin to spurt and warships battle above. The Mellenium Falcon begin to tear in atmoshpere.
"The Jedi have always been a problem since the days of the old Republic. They have caused wars among themselves that nearly annihilates our way of life. Well now it's time to fight back. I have found away to use the ysalamari's blood as the answer to this phenomon, allow me to introduce the cure from the Jedi."
Lando Carlrissian says,"You do know how the Dark Jedi would respond to this. Don't you?".
Stryfe looks down on his army, an army full of Battle Droids from the old Republic's Clone Wars, Imperial Renmants, Dark Jedi, Clone Troops of the Clone Wars, Alien militias, Cyborgs of Clones and Battle Droids, Bounty Hunters and the new Mandalorians led by Boba Fett, and resurected Sith Troops.
"Who is this Stryfe guy anyway?" asks Han.
"It's a Jedi legend,"said the force-ghost of Obi-Wan Kenobi,"Stryfe was one of the first Jedi and the first to turn to the Dark Side. After the death of his family by anti-Jedi mobs, Stryfe gone beyond the power of any Jedi and wiped them out. He was born strong with the Dark Side and his anger against normal beings released it. He soon gathered an army of "Dark" Jedi but was soon banished to the Outer Rim which included the alien Sith planet Korriban where he learned the Sith secrets of the Dark Side in which it consumed him and executed the Sith species renaming those Dark Jedi who also learned the Sith secrets as Sith Lords. He soon vanished.
If you actually met him then you have faced the literal face of the Dark Side."

Strfe attacks Luke Skywalker with an extreme Force Lightning. Both engage in a lightsaber duelStryfe repeatidly punches or kicks Luke and attacks with the Force. There was a gran explosion. Luke was on the floor with a scar over his right eye as he watches the miracle return of the Emperor, full flesh and blood and not as scarred, deformed, or old as he the one he met on Endor. The Emperor laughs and fires the dreadful Force Lightning ten times more painful than what he felt in on Endor. But this time his father couldn't save him.

"We should go back to Coruscant, destroy the Republic and regain our home," shouted the newly reborn Emperor as him army cheered.
On Coruscant, Republic leaders dabate on using the serum as a weapon on all Jedi. On Yavin IV, Coruscant, and every other Jedi bases, Jedi follow Stryfe into his new Order, including Anakin Solo.

Republic Warships head to Endor where the first fight against the new Empire and his Emperor take place. "The Republic shall end where it began."

"YOU WILL KILL LUKE SKYWALKER!"screamed the Emperor's voice in Mara's head. Everything shatters around her while something is happening inside of her. Luke tries to calm her down but then her eyes go dark and she attacks with her Force powers. On Endor she stand next to the Emperor as he delivers a fight against the Republic army both there and Coruscant.

On Coruscant AT-ATs attack the city and Stryfe's power loses control.
Boba Fett chokes Han Solo. Mace Windu attacks Luke on a forest planet. Jaina takes he baby cousin Ben with Taz while being followed by the Empire. Taz's back is on the tree while being menaced by Jaina as she moves her purple saber near his neck. "Who are you?"

Jacen Solo calls out to his seduced brother, Anakin, but Anakin replies only in a Force Fireball attack. Both engage in a lightsaber duel in a building that has caught on fire.

Boba attacks Mace Windu, Han screames "You killed my parents!" to a shadowy figure, Leia and Mara fight in a lightsaber duel, space battles begins all over, Luke screams in pain in the air while Stryfe attacks!
"I need your help.....father," says Luke as his father out as he looked years ago.Before Vader.

Return, Revelations and Revenge

An epic of adventure, tragedy, redemption, romance and loss. This is the fanfic where it will concludes everyones story in a thrilling way. Updating shortly.

Rated PG-13 for high action violence and tragic story.

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(Sorry if it was long or any gramitcal errors.))
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Doom · Posted: Sat Dec 16, 2006 10:30 pm Post subject:

Sorry-damn computer.
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Doom · Posted: Tue Dec 19, 2006 09:50 pm Post subject:

Nice poster. I am certainly reading that fic. Can someone review my second trailer?
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Sure thing bro.

In short. It looks fantastic. It would be a better trailer with more appropriate spacing for my reading benefit but the content is supreme. I cant wait to read and finally review your Fic. Laughing

ForceFusion · Posted: Wed Dec 20, 2006 05:39 pm Post subject:

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Hou-Jo Poleb · Darth Vader Joined: 25 Jun 2002 Posts: 17555

TEASER TRAILER
Rated PG-13 for Violence, Drug Reference, and Crude Language

AN UN-NAMED SUPERHERO…

“Why do they call him The Prison Man?”

HIS ONLY MONIKER GIVEN BY THE PRESS…

FLASH: It is still a mystery to police officials how he was initially brought into the prison by mistake…

A DARK VIGILANTE THAT SHOWS NO MERCY…

*The limosouever flew across the skyline as it came from the Spiral Center, passing Americaina, the vertical, up-flowing water monument to the second American Civil War that stemmed from the ground, nearly half a mile below*

POLED PRODUCTIONS PRESENTS…

“I thought the news said he had a chain wrapped around his shoulders or something…”

A NEW ADVENTURE FROM AWARD-WINNING AUTHOR HOU-JO POLEB…

DRAKEN: I want this “prison-man” dead. Dead.

IN ASSOCIATION WITH BOX OFFICE BREWERY…

JEFF: You do something with your life kid, you hear?

A LEGEND BEGINS…

KELLY: … police hope to put a rest to the speculation of this vigilante once and for all…

Jeffrey Levesque
Lex Draken
Kelly Reima
Joesph “Flash” Leary
AND Jimmy Haero

“I am The Punisher for a new age. I am the answer for this city’s plea for a Batman, the mortal Kal-El of Earth. I will see society freed from its chains in a united Nation where everyone is created equal. My name is…”

-THE PRISON MAN-

JON: You know quite frankly we don't know what to call this guy.

COMING TO JNET SUMMER 2007
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Silas · Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 09:23 pm Post subject:

Well, ever since I've gotten hooked on the Fox TV series 24, I've been dying to write something with it, and I think I've come up with an idea. It would kind of follow Obi-Gone's Loop Holes, but definatley not the same.

Title: The Ties That Bind
Author: Silas
Rating: PG-13 for Violence, Language, Scenes of Romance

The Ties that Bind- A 24/Star Wars Crossover

Teaser

Jack Bauer’s gun slowly dropped to his waist. A man stood before him, holding some kind of laser sword. It had a blue outer appearance, holding a white-hot core. Its very presence pierced Jack’s eyes. He was forced to squint, and eventually turn away. The man was about middle height, with a well-kept goatee. His hair was kept short, though longer than Jack’s was. He wore some type of robe Jack had come to expect from the middle easterners who he had come in contact with during his years of work for CTU.

“Jack,” the man said with a strangely mild English accent. “Holster your weapon. I’m not here to hurt you.”

Jack looked around. He had no idea where he was, but it was covered in sand and smelled like a garbage dump.

“How am I supposed to believe you?” Jack asked, his voice raspy, but never wavering. “I don’t know where I am, who you are, or what I’m doing here.”

Jack himself didn’t look much better. He wore a tight dark olive green T-shirt, beige dockers, and a brown leather jacket. His forehead dripped with sweat. Jack knew that he must be in some middle eastern country and the man in from of him was a terrorist, but he didn’t know how they had managed to get him from his home in Los Angeles, California to a middle eastern country without waking him. Drugs probably, which didn’t help him, considering he had just gotten over a heroin addiction, but he could figure that out later.

“Jack, I can’t convince you that I’m not going to hurt you, you’re just going to have to trust me, which I know can be a very hard thing for you, but it’s that or I can take you in by force.”

Jack thought it over. He knew that he could go in covert, and undercover, but the chances that he would get out again were slim. Still it was the best chance he had.

“Fine, but first you tell me where we are, why I’m here, and who you are,” Jack said forcefully.

A small, open topped vehicle pulled up beside the man. It was a beige color, like almost everything else around him, and apparently floated in midair, though Jack knew that wasn’t possible.

“Get in Jack, I’ll explain as much as I can on the way back to my house.”

Jack slowly walked over to the vehicle, never letting his weapon fall lower than it already was. He approached cautiously and carefully, drenched in sweat. As soon as he was in the man looked over to him.

“Well Jack, I can’t answer you’re second question, but to answer the others I’m Obi-Wan Kenobi, a Jedi Knight of old, and welcome to Mos Eisley.”

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Black Screen

[VO - N-11 Ordo] It's strange, living each day knowing that your life is worthless. To your superiors your just another number. Kal promised to change that for us. He promised to give us our lives back.

Fade in from black to Kal Skirata standing with his hand on Ordo's shoulder

[VO - Kal] I promise you Ord'ika, we'll find Ko Sai and we'll have him make this right

Kal and the Nulls land on Kamino

A blaster battle in flawless white halls

A Null throws a grenade which explodes violently

Flashes to a scene of Skirata and Delta/Omega squads assembled in front of a group of Jedi

[VO - Mace Windu] We're sending you to Muunilinst, your target is the Separatist leadership

A star destroyer speeds through space in a battle with several crusiers

Kal and the commandos pursue a subject on Muunilinst

Flashes to a scene of Kal assembled in front of the Nulls

[VO - Kal] There's nothing left for us here, but I've tracked down Sai, it's time for us to finish this once and for all.

A fierce battle on Mygeeto

Rain pours on the commandos on Kamino

Thousands of clone troopers descend on the Jedi Temple

Atin lines up a shot with Walon Vau in his scope

Bardan Jusik fights for his life in the Temple

Etiam Tur-Mukan looks behind her an a grassy planet

Darman rips off his helmet and smashes it into a wall

Ordo raises his gun

Kal cries out as he runs towards a comrade

REPUBLIC COMMANDO: OUR VENGEANCE

Read the story here, download the trailer music here.

Hou-Jo Poleb · Darth Vader Joined: 25 Jun 2002 Posts: 17555

The Following Trailer is Suitable for All Audiences

DAK: You are under arrest for practicing law enforcement without a badge and for the destruction of New Alcatraz Prison Complex…

…POLEB PRODUCTIONS…

ANCHOR: The Prison Man. Urban Myth or vigilante with a mission?

…IN ASSOCIATION WITH BOX OFFICE BREWERY…

FLASH: We live in a bright world of tomorrow.

A man places a blindfold on himself, wearing fingerless black gloves.

FLASH: Crime is down, poverty is gone in the streets, and technology has made human life more luxurious than ever before.

He stepped away from a wall filled with weapons, his trench coat flowing as he turned around.

FLASH: However, we still seem to have at least one person who is not content with these all-time lows in human treachery.

He looked down at his feet, and could see the entire city as if he was floating above it.

FLASH: Clad in black with thick chain links adorned on his shoulders, one man has made it his mission to do away with what little crime we have left.

The invisible floor rippled and he passed through it, falling into the night sky of the city. Wind whistled past him from the speed of his descent. He grabbed a pole, completed a single spinning rotation and continued to fall toward his destination.

FLASH: The night walker… the strangely named Prison-Man.

*A chain straddles a pole, each end hitting and knocking a man out.*

BLACK SCREEN

*Sharp metal on the strands of hair whip around and dig into another’s eye*

BLACK SCREEN

*A larger man is thrown off the top of a building just as police are leaving the scene*

BLACK SCREEN

. . . .

KELLY: I’m here at the scene of what was initially a robbing of Family General Dairu has now evolved into a murder scene. Once the suspect is in stable condition, police hope to put a rest to the speculation of this vigilante once and for all.

A man is wheeled into surgery in intense condition. A wipe on the screen reveals him with bandages and in a stable state.

DOCTOR: Mr. Lex Draken. You have some scratches and a gash in your face, but the most damage is to your right eye.

An X-ray is shown of the sickening damage that occurred. He guided with a pen as he described the injuries.

DOCOTR: Whatever he used, he cut all the way past the lense and into the vitrous humour, ripping the suspensory ligament. We performed extensive surgery and used hypo-élanic radiation therapy to heal the nerves and retina. Due to the radiation treatment your eye will be susceptible to infection and/or mutation for the next three days, so we will not be able to physically inspect your eye until that time.

Draken rips the bandages off in a fit of rage. With light rushing into his eye he howls in pain and attacks the medical team treating him.

BLACK SCREEN

Lex Draken opens his eye. It is all pale blue, except for a black pupil.

BLACK SCREEN

LEX: Hello concerned citizens, I’m achin’. If you think your “Prison-Man” is a threat to you all than you can’t WAIT to see what I’m capable of.

ANCHOR: This finally appears to be a threat deserving of having Vigilante 3532.

A chain spawns from Draken’s palm, hitting the masked crusader in the face.

LEX: Don’t worry Jimmy, ain’t not’in’ gonn happen; I brought my gun this time.

Draken and Weapon X lock swords while dueling.

KIN: He wants to kill you, *BLEEP*

Draken stands over a man in a wrestling ring.

JIMMY: I'm not like that anymore, Lex!

DAK: He's not a superhero! We're not treating him like one!

LEX: I'm going to make "Weapon X" suffer for what he did to me. You’ll shut the hell up and do as you’re told, kid.

"PRISON-MAN": and I told him to turn his life around!

The Prison Man swings in and kicks Draken in the jaw, knocking him down.

THIS SUMMER

"You are the ultimate test."

A LEGEND IS BORN

STARRING:
Detective Joesph Allan “Flash” Leary
Lex Draken
Kelly Reima
Jimmy Haero
Dak Johnsen
And Kin KcInnim

AWARD WINNING AUTHOR HOU-JO POLEB PRESENTS:

He aimed upward and fired a single round, cutting a rope holding a heavy object attached to the other end of his chain. He dropped the gun and was launched up into the sky. He pulled the chain away as he cleared the anvil and rested the chain on his shoulders. He pulled on the building as he flew upward to keep his momentum, finally landing in the ICU. Lex threw a fireball at the Prison Man.

BLACK SCREEN

Several cops aim their pistols at Draken.

COP: Freeze! I said freeze!

LEX: Give me an ice cube and I'll see what I can do.

COMING TO THE JEDI LIBRARY JUNE 1st 2007
(RATED R FOR CRUDE, GRAPHIC VIOLENCE, ACTION SEQUENCES, ADULT LANGUAGE, AND SOME DRUG REFERENCE)
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DeltaSnake · Posted: Thu May 31, 2007 03:00 pm Post subject:

*Non-Star Wars*
*Minor violence*

One Man Duel.

Voice: They taught him how to kill...

Leon Stone fire his rifle. The six rounds lodged in a nearby man's chest as he falls to the ground; dead.

Voice: They taught him how to infiltrate...

Leon stands in the doorway of the plane in snonw white B.D.Us. He leaps out and waits to deploy his parachute to land in the Greenland country side.

Voice: They rigged him for a deadly test...

A scientis looks at Major Kyle Derry "Sir, the serum won't work!" The major looks at the scientist in anger "Don't doubt me boy!"

Voice: The one they forgot, was teaching him to stop...

Leon fires a round in to a to a nearby Coast Guard officer before running behind a nearby metal storage box to dodge machinegun fire.

Voice: It will be the last mistake they'll ever make...

*Black screen*
*Foot steps*
*Leon comes in to view*
Leon: You ready for this punk!?!
*Leon pushes camera over*
*See Leon's feet slowly walk off camera*

Keep your eyes peeled for One Man Duel.
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Something flashes across the screen...

Star Wars: Mysteries of the Past

Coming Sometime

Stryfe · Bossk Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 654 Location: Miami baby

If you saw episode III then you kinda know what happens to the majority of the Jedi.
But what happens to those who survived?
How did the experience traumatized or changed the ways of those who survived?
Why did the Empire need to recruit non-clone officers?
What has become of the clone Boba Fett?
How does Anakin cope in becoming Vader and his past?
How did the Empire gets so powerful so quickly?
What is the truth behind the construction delay of the first Death Star?
How did the Rebel Alliance gain much support and begin to honor the Jedi by saying "May the Force be with you"?

All of these questions and more would be answered in my new fan fic called

Star Wars: The Dark Times
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DeltaSnake · Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 09:34 am Post subject:

"One Man Duel" is cancelled. I'm startiing a new one.

*Non-Star Wars*
*Extreme Gore*
*Swearing*
*Violence*

Voice: God knows where they came from...

Sarge: Clear that doorway!
Eyes: Room-Jesus Christ, what is that thing!?!
*Gun fire*
Eyes: I can't hit...
Sparks: Eyes is down!"

Voice: They are nightmares from parts unknown...

Radio: It just came out of the f****** ground, I need back up in sec...!

Voice: A man and his squad are now stuck in the middle of Boston, fighting for their lives...

Sarge: Get the MG in that window, barricade that door, and god da**** someone get that radio working!

Voice: Only God Almighty knows if they'll survive...

Look out for: Soldiers of Fortune.
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Tiana Calthye · Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 06:47 pm Post subject:

The screen goes DARK.

Blue text ripples up onto the screen, echoed by the narrator.

FEMALE NARRATOR (EMPRESS DAILYN) (V.O.)
The eyes will open.

INT. IMPERIAL PALACE - AFTERNOON

A pair of eyes snap open. Pan out to reveal ANAKIN SKYWALKER.

EMPRESS DAILYN (O.S.)
Every day, we draw closer to extinquishing the Jedi race from the face of the galaxy. We willl wipe this scum away with one final blow!

(O.S.) A CHEER is heard. Anakin steps out of the shadows, lightsaber in hand, eyes frantic and haunted. His brown robes are tattered and worn. He creeps through the halls towards a set of transparent, wraith-like curtains and whips them aside, revealing a balcony and the EMPRESS.

He presses his lightsaber to the side of the Empress's head.

A GASP rises up from the crowd. A cry is heard. "ASSASSIN!" "GUARDS!"

EMPRESS DAILYN
So... at last the Jedi reveal themselves.

She VANISHES a moment before his thumb touches the ignitor. His blue beam springs to life, but there is nothing there.

He is shoved over with a blast of the Force, two Sith guards TEARING his saber away, and pinning him down. One knocks him heavily over the head, slapping stuncuffs around his wrists as the other takes the lightsaber and gives it a look of disgust.

GUARD #2
Obsolete technology.

He passes it to one of the Empress's HANDMAIDENS. The handmaidens wear HUGE, all encompassing blue robes that cover black bodysuits. All that can be seen of the handmaiden is her thin red lips. Her eyes are hidden by goggles, as are all the handmaidens.

GUARD #2
Destroy it.

SCREEN GOES TO BLACK

Blue words again swim up.

NARRATOR, EMPRESS DAILYN (V.O.)
But the eyes are still closed.

Pan out, through the ROYAL GARDENS, over the FOUNTAINS and through the SPRAY OF MIST.

MALE VOICE (V.O.)
And what do we do with the captured Jedi, your Highness?

Pan into a MUSEUM, a HOLOGRAM, a LIGHTSABER and some ANCIENT ROBES on display. A sign reads SURVIVING ARTIFACTS FROM NABOO.

EMPRESS DAILYN (V.O.)
Have him kil...no.
(a beat)
He may yet be of some use alive. Have him SUBDUED.

MALE VOICE (V.O.)
As you wish. Heh heh.

Screen goes black.

NARRATOR, EMPRESS DAILYN (V.O.)
But we WILL find them.

WORDS appear on screen.

WHERE THE EYES OPEN

Theme music goes quiet. Cut to--

INT. JEDI TEMPLE - NIGHT

Obi-Wan sits up in bed, eyes wide. He wears a black tunic. He glances over to check the time. Pan across the clock, which reads 4:03, and into the black between the numbers to show:

WHERE THE EYES OPEN
COMING THIS SUMMER TO A FORUM NEAR YOU

Starring Anakin Skywalker as Anakin Skywalker, "Ben" Kenobi as Obi-Wan, Yoda as himself and featuring Dailyn Faldoes as the EMPRESS.
This feature is rated PG-13 for violence, action sequences, mild language and angst.
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Galadriel Kenobi · Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 05:33 am Post subject:

Looks interesting. (It also sounds extremely suspenseful.)

I can't help wondering what the galaxy is like if a lightsaber is obsolete technology. Very Happy

I'll be looking forward to reading it as soon as you start posting.
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Amidala Skywalker · Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 06:59 am Post subject:

Nice trailer! Looks great! Definately caught my interest.

Looking forward to reading it! No guarantees as to posting replies, unless I get time, but I'd love to read it!
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Tiana Calthye · Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 07:23 am Post subject:

Silas · Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 11:34 am Post subject:

Sounds amazing T. I can't wait to read it, certainly going to follow this one.
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Stryfe · Bossk Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 654 Location: Miami baby

For 2007 I want to start fresh and give you stories you would want to read but I have two ideas and don't know what to start with. Maybe you could help. Earlier you read an idea for a story I have that is pretty much I want to see in the live-action series which covers the gap between ROTS and ANH; here I bring to you another idea.

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You know how it began-

We see scenes of the PT.

You know how it ended-

You see the OT.

But after you've seen the ending of the saga (ep.VI) did you feel that the ending was missing something? Did you think the ending could have been more epic and complex? Di you feel it was the weakest in only the OT?

Well coming soon is an alternative ending to ep.VI.
An alternate version of ep.VI entirely. It would accomplish what ep.VI but change the flow of the entire story in ways that is enjoyable to read and imagine.

Look out for
Star Wars: Return of the Jedi- Epic Version

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This is my second idea and first is couple post above. PLZ Tell me what sounds more interesting to start with this year and focus on.
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Tiana Calthye · Posted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 07:40 am Post subject:

I'd say the first one--but honestly, write whichever is more interesting to YOU. Either is an interesting story, write whichever one you find more interesting.

I also kind of like RotJ, that's all...

Also, maybe work on kicking your trailers up a notch. Watch a few... and make yours more like those than a summary, maybe. Mine was in proper screenplay format but you don't have to do that...
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Stryfe · Bossk Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 654 Location: Miami baby

Actually I usually prepare my trailers like movie trailers but these are still ideas so far. Thank You for writing an opinion. I actually like the first idea more because it's more original and all that. I think I'm gonna start working on that one.
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Silas · Posted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 03:39 pm Post subject:

Either idea would be great, and I would read either of them. Personally I think writing what you want to write brings more pleasure than trying to look out for an audience. We're not a box office.
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Tiana Calthye · Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2007 07:40 am Post subject:

YAY VIDEO TRAILER! Clips are kinda just... filler. It really has nothing to do with Kingdom Hearts, those are just the only clips I readily know where to find... and I couldn't find my old Star Wars ones... oh well. I'm working on doing bad stick figure animation instead, but this might take a while.

Here is t3h download link. ^.^ I had no time to YouTube it or anything, so you're stuck with a download til later.

Where the Eyes Open temporary video trailer

Same trailer, but it should be embedded rather than download.
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Amidala Skywalker · Posted: Tue Jul 31, 2007 08:15 am Post subject:

That was cool, Tiana! I liked it. Acually, Anakin and the main Kingdom Hearts dude (I forget his name at the moment) look enough alike for it to transition alright.

Nice work. My interest is piqued. Wink

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Tiana Calthye · Posted: Tue Jul 31, 2007 06:13 pm Post subject:

Mythicaa · Watto Joined: 22 Jul 2007 Posts: 211 Location: Aussieland

A young woman sits alone in a cell.
Darkness surrounds her.
Sounds of humming float through the walls. The space station is moving.
Light stings her eyes as the door is suddenly opened.
She is approached by her captor.
The threat of more torture devices looms in the faces peering in from the corridor beyond.
A single question cuts through the silence.
“Where in the world is Carmen SandyEgo?”

A NEW ROPE

A woman hits a young man strapped into a chair with a soft fluffy pink cushion.
“But if you stay, we’d have to share the cushion.”

A guy standing in the desert pulls a face of confusion. “Cushions?”

A girl stands in a cantina screaming with excitement. “LIKE-OMG-IS-THAT-A-LUKIEPOO-BUCKETOFLOVE-MASTEROFALL-DOLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!”

A large fat Jabba like being slithers across the floor of a hangar. “I want my Mon-Mothma-in-her-teen-years doll back.”

A chick hangs over the side of a speedercar. “They might have been following the cushions.” She says as she throws another one from the speeding vehicle.

A good stands in the desert looking dumbstruck. “Cushions?”

A woman smiles sweetly at a squad of troopers. “The flirt is with you, young one.” She says to a young woman standing next to her.
The young woman looks to a young man who is staring at her chest-nut hair. “I don’t FLIRT!”

A slender young chick stands in the middle of the desert… wearing a pink fairy tutu outfit and waving a wand that emitted glitter everytime it moved. “I want those psycho’s brought to me NOW! I need some more cushions.”

A guy is sitting on a concrete floor rocking back and forth looking quite distressed. “Cushions?”

Comical AU
As written by Mythicaa
Coming soon
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Skye Organa · Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 10:44 pm Post subject:

Welcome back Mythie!

I look forward to reading your side splitting fic's again. You're one of the best comic ficcers and I for one am so glad to see you return.
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NavyGal · Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 04:24 am Post subject:

YAYNESS!!! I can't wait to read your stuff again Robyn... don't disappear or I will hunt you down! Laughing

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Mythicaa · Watto Joined: 22 Jul 2007 Posts: 211 Location: Aussieland

Well, I can't run away from you, you keep sending threatening text messages whenever I disappear Wink

But I have a life now so I can come on a bit more often and post

maybe even one day I will FINALLY get aorund to that 'M' word.
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Voice-Over: Who are you?

The person closest to you.

Quatre Seraphim: The Jedi Republic has kept the galaxy safe since it's inception. Who would oppose peace?

If you would call it peace.

VO: Do I know you?

You could call me brother.

Reporter: The new Jedi Museum was found broken into and burglarized this morning.

You could call me a terrorist.

VO: Why me?

Because of who you are.

Seraphim: The Jedi Task Force will find this criminal.

VO: And who am I?

A sith...

PARALLELS
...coming soon...
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Tiana Calthye · Posted: Tue Oct 09, 2007 12:59 am Post subject:

I'd read it, Zero. I like the concept and it's hooking.

No shiny pictures in this one yet. But you can see my last trailer for the correct logo anyway. Wink

BLACK SCREEN

ANAKIN SKYWALKER (V.O.)
Damn! Damn, damn... damn!

Fade in to show Anakin Skywalker wearing standard Jedi clothes, pacing the interior of a cell. Bars seperate his from other cells--he is not in isolation.

ANAKIN
I hate you all! You hear that?! I hate you all!

The DOOR SLIDES OPEN. Hands bound behind his back, OBI-WAN KENOBI is shoved into the cell.

GUARD
(laughs)
Little bit "DARK SIDE", don't you think, Jedi? Here's a cell mate to keep you company!

Obi-Wan hits the ground. Anakin catches him without thinking as the door is slammed shut.

ANAKIN
(swears)
Kriffing guards.
(pats Obi-Wan's face)
Hey. Sith. Wake up.

Obi-Wan sputters a bit as he comes back to.

OBI-WAN
...S-sith?

Blue words swim up onto the screen:
IMAGINE.
A WORLD NOTHING LIKE YOU HAVE EVER SEEN.
IMAGINE.

EXT. CORUSCANT ROOFTOPS

Clip: Obi-Wan plummets into the mist.

Words again:
WATCHING YOURSELF DIE.

INT. THE JEDI TEMPLE

Clip: Anakin walking into his room, suddenly grabbed from behind.

EMPRESS DAILYN (V.O.)
The Jedi cannot hide forever.

INT. IMPERIAL PALACE CHAMBERS

Clip: Two handmaidens walk down the hall. One of them falls, hit by a poison dart.

PADME
No!

Words again:
WATCHING YOUR FRIENDS DIE.

EXT. IMPERIAL GARDENS, NEAR A FOUNTAIN

Clip: QUI-GON JINN and TANON YOUNG dash after a lightsaber-wielding intruder. Zoom past him to reveal that he is OBI-WAN KENOBI.

MALE (V.O.)
Your Highness! The Jedi! We've found them!

EMPRESS DAILYN (V.O.)
Excellent.

Obi-Wan stumbles. His lightsaber is wretched from his hand by Qui-Gon. Qui-Gon looks BETRAYED.

QUI-GON
I _trusted_ you.

Fade to black. Words swim up.
YOUR WORLD DIE.

Cut through clips quickly.

CLIP 1: Anakin falls down stairs, crashing into PADME.
CLIP 2: A blaster bolt cuts past Obi-Wan.
CLIP 3: A handmaiden, lightsaber held to her throat by a dark figure.
CLIP 4: Yoda, spinning to meet another fighter in combat.
CLIP 5: A dark figure, striding into the archives.
CLIP 6: Tatooine, a male Jedi and a female Sith stand, lightsabers at their sides, neither in combat.

FEMALE SITH
We cannot rebuild both our orders.

MALE JEDI
(kneels before her)
Then make your choice.

Fade to black.

PADME (V.O.)
Imagine... what if the truth is wrong... what if everything we've ever believed is _wrong_, Anakin...

TITLE SCREEN

STAR WARS
WHERE THE EYES OPEN
Now playing at a forum near you.

Starring Anakin Skywalker as Anakin Skywalker, "Ben" Kenobi as Obi-Wan, Yoda as himself and featuring Dailyn Faldoes as the EMPRESS.
This feature is rated PG-13 for violence, action sequences, mild language and angst. A Star Wars AU.
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Stryfe · Bossk Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 654 Location: Miami baby

This is a little bit from my new AU story Star Wars:Return of the Jedi (EPIC). These are just a couple of paragraphs and there more to it but I don't want to show much and I'm still working on the concept of description and interesting writing, but I would like a bit of feedback so read and respond honestly:

Space. The stars twinkled an seemingly endless light that make the vast darkness of space somewhat lighter. It is calm yet elusive. There is a small blue and green planet in the what seems the middle of nowhere. This is Aqualli. One of the imperial planets in which is inhabitants work hard practically all day, every day for the Imperial war efforts against the Rebellion.

Above the distant comes about two large sleek star- destroyers coming out of hyper-space. Since the battle of Hoth the Emperor decided that all war-vessels should carry the most sophisticated technology and has even improved upon the TIE fighters to make them stronger than their Clone Wars predecessors. These new TIE fighters still resemble greatly to what the rebellion has faced but are now less bulky and much faster and stronger.

As the newly-designed star-destroyers descend closer to planet, the herds of screeching TIE fighters jettison to all sides. Their new predator-like images halted workers in their place. Then came out a white shuttle familiar to all as the private ship of their supreme commander. Accompanied by two fighters, the shuttle lands at the main entrance to the capital building. Imperial storm troopers marched out of the darkness of the tall and began to fire laser-bolts aimlessly into the air. Natural thunder echoed across the city as a storm cloud covered the city in a blanket of darkness. Mothers took their children inside their small homes and workers were interrogated by the mad troopers.

Rain begun to fall from the sky as the lightning and thunder grew more frequent as the hostility in the city grew. The ramp to the private shuttle hissed open and Imperial officers came down in an organized traditional manner. Imperial troops came out of the main building with the former senator of Aqualli and the royal family. All were force to kneel in the direction of the shuttle. Then he appeared. His cool mechanical breathing against the coldness of the storm was extremely creepy to the citizens. This fear increased when they raised their bowed head to set their eyes on a monster. Dressed in an all jet black cloak, the darkness of the clouds above hiding his pitched black skull-like mask, this person did not look like a mere mortal. This was true. He wasn’t a mere a mortal. He was more than that. He was the portal between man and machine, life and death, love and hatred, and essentially good and evil. To the small growing band of Rebellion, he was the destroyer of worlds but to these men and women before him now, he was a lot worse. He was the one who brought about carnage through out the galaxy and to their world. He was their supreme commander. He was the Dark Lord of the Sith. He was Darth Vader.
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darth shadowlord · Posted: Tue Feb 05, 2008 09:21 pm Post subject:

COMING SOON Angel of Vengeance

I stood amongst a mass of bodies lying crumpled on the floor of a nuclear power plant. Looking around, I bowed my head for a moment, quietly murmuring a prayer in Latin for those souls which I had been dispatched to take vengeance upon by the command of the Almighty. Once the prayer was finished, I raised the gleaming silver cross to my lips before letting it fall as groan was heard from behind me. Turning silently, I looked down as a man stretched out his arm and reached toward my leg. “Mercy please, show me mercy.”

“Mercy? You beg for mercy now as those you and your men killed those who begged for mercy. Listen to what I say and listen closely. You refused to grant mercy as you slaughtered the innocents that worked in this building. As such, your fate is sealed by the Almighty.” I lifted the gun in my right hand and sighted down the barrel, then squeezed the trigger once. The report echoed once in the hallway then all was eerily silent. Crossing myself slowly I knelt, bowing my head to the floor. “Vengeance has rendered the wicked low and the evil doer to answer for his deeds. Lord God, their souls are laid before you, to judge them as you will.”
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Tiana Calthye · Posted: Mon Apr 28, 2008 10:43 pm Post subject:

From the creator that brought you (and abandoned) MIRRORMATH...

...Comes a story that isn't really that new if you think about it...

...And possibly makes even less sense than Where the Eyes Open...

And is inexplicably far worse than Waking Dream because it's so full of metaphysical crap if she actually finishes it, no one will ever be able to think properly again...

But hell, you guys keep asking for it...

From the MANICAL CRAZED BRAIN OF THE AWARD WINNING AUTHOR: TIANA CALTHYE...

A trailer.

EXT. TATOOINE - MIDDAY

One lone figure stands on the dunes, staring at the transparent image of a Nubian spacecraft. His face is hidden by a sand mask and a hood, protecting his features. Only amber-brown eyes show.

VO (unknown)
There was a place where everything could have changed. There are many of these places. But who can see them? No one can hear us anymore. We scream but they do not listen. Only YOU can hear us. Deliver us.

CUT TO -
Anakin sitting and swinging his legs from a bunk, LEIA beside him.

ANAKIN
Tatooine was like a prison. I'm glad I'm not there anymore. I mean, I miss MOM, but... not Tatooine. I don't think anyone could. It's nicer here. More alive...

A tear trails down Leia's cheek.

ANAKIN
Why are you crying?

CUT TO - TATOOINE DUNES

The figure turns and heads off, away from the ship and into the desert. As he walks, the desert opens up underneath his feet, letting him walk on what first seems to be a chasm, but closer is seen to be black sand.

VO
YOU MUST NOT LET HIM ESCAPE.

CUT TO -
Luke standing on an endless white plain. His clothing is simple and black, and the white echos with voices.

The white materializes into the rough outline of a person.

LUKE
Who are you?

WHITE FIGURE
Everything that you fight.

THE NEW SITH ORDER:
DELIVERANCE

Coming eventually to a forum near you.

I mean, come on, I even wrote the beginning of it, that's a good sign, right?
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More WtEO first plz. K thnx.
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Tiana Calthye · Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 03:25 am Post subject:

Anakin T Skywalker · Taun We Joined: 15 Mar 2008 Posts: 3961 Location: Ingary

Sounds awesome, Tiana. I wanna read it when it happens.

And MORE! (tantrums)
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Amidala Skywalker · Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 09:39 am Post subject:

Tiana...Tiana...Tiana...Are you ever going to finish a fic?? Now you're advertising a new one? I'd rather you finish Mirrormath! I never understood that fic, because you never finished it, and now there's going to be a new one to torment me with unknowingness-with-what's-going-on...-ness?

It looks good though. Naturally. Wink

*cough* More WTEO first!
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Tiana Calthye · Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 02:27 pm Post subject:

Dartha Athanth · Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 06:37 pm Post subject:

I really think we should have a finished fic 'catalogue' sticky. *coughs*
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Scorp Jedi Knight · Posted: Tue Apr 29, 2008 06:42 pm Post subject:

This would help lurkers like myself, who read and get slightly wrapped up in unfinshed stories.
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Zero · L.K.N. Joined: 06 Jul 2002 Posts: 10117

Voice-Over: At the formation of the Republic as a galactic power, the Jedi relinquished their battle armor to assure the new government they did not intend to rule the galaxy.

That was then.

Ben Skywalker: The New Republic has proven to us that the corruption of the senators and planetary governors cannot be prevented with their form of government. The Jedi will now assume control of the Senate and Courts.

VO: Extreme technological advancement occurred due to Jedi rule.

Drace Kalib: It is with great pride we announce the next phase of galactic travel. We call it superluminal speed. Before a ship would need to refuel several times in order to go from one corner of the galaxy to another. Now, using wormholes, a frigate can easily go from Endor to Yavin and back several times.

This is now.

Master Ferro-Ghis: The council is uneasy about this, Kalib. Even with the help of a navigation computer, it's impossible to safely predict the intangibles of wormhole technology.

DK: I'm so sure of it, Master, that I will lead the scouting team.

The Colossus exits the wormhole unexpectedly, jarring the passengers from their seats.

VO: If only simulations were accurate.

Pilot: Where are we? We're on no known location in the galaxy.

DK: This world is host to what appears to be a sentient parasite.

A Jedi screams out in pain and terror.

Contrite Ragnos: We must hurry if we are to save your people.

DK: You are sure about this?

CR: It is my purpose!

VO: The Jedi have damned us to what we thought we were free of fearing.

CR: Hurry, Reclaimer...

...there isn't much time...

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Andon Colos · Posted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 12:49 pm Post subject:

*black screen*

MVO: I woke up in a woman's basement today.

FVO: Is that normal for you...

*screen fades to a man in his early twenties jolting awake confusedly, eyes locking onto a depiction of the patron St. Paul within a stained glass window. The startled yelp of a woman in her sixties breaks his concentration. Her pale blue eyes search in wonder as the basket of laundry slips from her grasp, tumbling across the floor. He jumps to his feet, panic setting in to where he was exactly. She takes a step back into the laundry room, he takes one forward hands up before a terrible pop and hiss turns their heads. Old propane grill begins to shimmer like water in the wind.*

FVO: ...to sleep in odd places?

*there's only time to push her back into the laundry room and shut the door behind her before the explosion comes. He's braced face first outside of the door; only the ringing of his ears breaks the silence and lets him know he's alive. His face and upper body are seen stepping back; he doesn't notice the smoke or fire burning along the wood paneling, only the charred door. A door turned warped and black save the dull brown silhouette of where he had placed his body against it.*

MVO: Not this way.

*He was running now, ducking into an empty park inlet. He removes his shirt checking for blisters and burns where there's none to be had. His back to the screen he looks over the shirt, dropping it in disbelief, just out of sight. Legs giving out, he falls into a sitting position hard as his head gives the inclination that he's still entranced by the fabric. The camera elevates as it angles over his back and shoulders to finally get a glimpse of the shirt, completely unharmed by shrapnel or burning.*

*scene shift, he's now sitting in a library, quiet chatter of students and teacher-aids about him. The same clothes are still evidently on him with the camera pan around, his dark eyes burrowing a hole into the table he's sitting at within deep thought. A girl passes by, stepping accidentally on the foot he left idly in the aisle. Her soft embarrassed face lightens faintly when she recognizes who it is*

Natalie: 'So quiet, I didn't see you there. Sorry.

Her voice was pleasant, in a kindly teasing way. He doesn't show any sign of acknowledging her.

Natalie: I guess statues don't respond?

No change in him.

Natalie: Connor, it's an apology. *quiet concern* I stepped on your foot.

Connor: *somberly* I know.

She takes the seat across from him, trying to read his gaze as she places her things down.

Natalie: Waiting for the table to look back?

Natalie: What happened?

Connor: It's been an odd day.

Natalie: I get that.

Connor: Not likely. There was a dream I had, nothing was the way I left it before it.

Natalie: I'm not following. Any help for the uncryptic? What was it?

Connor: There was singing, almost too beautiful, there was nothing outside it... like a roar. I didn't know the words, but I sung too. It's all different now *facial expression relaxes*...don't worry they'll show up.

Natalie: I'm sorry?

Connor: I don't know, feels like you're waiting for something. I don't know, it's in your face.

Natalie: What really happened?

Connor: It's just... I can't tell.

Natalie: Connor...

Connor: Words aren't enough.

*her phone begins to vibrate, she ignores*

Natalie: Yes they are.

*phone vibrates again, he hasn't said anything. Another moment and he's just as quiet. She exhales in frustration as if she's about to leave. The phone vibrates again and it moves, only no one's touched it. It slowly slides across the table towards the pair of his fingers laying in its direction. He keeps his eyes down and she looks in disbelief, mouth over hand. His fingers change their angle and the vibrating phone moves towards her, hovering a few millimeters off the table. Unconsciously she answers the phone as Connor looks up.*

Girl on phone: Hey, sorry I'm late. I don't think I'll be able to meet up with you until after this lab. Alright?

Natalie: ...

*screen goes black as a phone clicking shut is heard*

FVO: *hushed racing exhale, inhale and exhale of breath*

MVO: Would you like to know what I saw?
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It's like cloverfield, except I'm so hoping it's zombie bombs! D:

Amidala Skywalker · Posted: Fri Oct 03, 2008 05:07 pm Post subject:

Creepy...nice...this sounds very intruiging, Andon! Good to see you back in fanfic, too!
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